How i'm feeling

Laydee-B · 06-10-2007, 09:37 AM

Its a lil rough...unedited

I could write a novel about you and me
Recreate tales of when we were us
We reeked of unity brought together by fate
Torn apart to early reunited too late
You see my face and turn away
I hear your name and yearn to explain
Social pressures took over my emotions now I understand two seeds and nine years later
But I’m too late
And often I found myself doing things with you in mind
Walking past hoping to see you or your friend
Why can’t we be friends walk the straight and narrow line?
Why couldn’t you be mine?
I feel the same chills when your name hits my tongue
But I must remain blind
This is in no way a trick to pull you in
This is my apology laced with passionate kisses
Small nibbles and caresses
My emotions raw and in the naked
Feeling me now can’t be equivalent to back in 98
Now a woman with experience in my plate
I wonder why I bit the forbidden apple and drank the poisonous wine
I committed fraud yearning for something which wasn’t meant to be mine
Although I’m not a criminal I gotta do the time
Which separates me from you but why?

I could write a collection of short stories of our love
I could write happy ending after happy ending with love making scenes
But I would be producing fiction and we both know the facts
Girl meets boy girl and boy fall in love girl hurts boy boy ditches girl
Girl tries and tries but boy locks the door and throws away the key
throws away me...and us and every possibility of happy endings

tamunobelema · 06-10-2007, 11:56 AM

like the emotion/mood of the poem.

Laydee-B · 06-11-2007, 12:58 AM

Thanks!

AwholeLOTTAsoul · 06-11-2007, 02:19 AM

so sad.
nice write-up

Olukoso · 06-13-2007, 07:44 PM

well done, laydee.

Efizzybaby · 06-13-2007, 07:53 PM

u almost there.....

06-10-2007, 09:37 AM	#1 (permalink)
Laydee-B Moderator Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 8,010 Points: 54,010.25 Bank: 5,000,207.13 Total Points: 5,054,217.38 Donate Rep Power: 1732215	How i'm feeling Its a lil rough...unedited I could write a novel about you and me Recreate tales of when we were us We reeked of unity brought together by fate Torn apart to early reunited too late You see my face and turn away I hear your name and yearn to explain Social pressures took over my emotions now I understand two seeds and nine years later But I’m too late And often I found myself doing things with you in mind Walking past hoping to see you or your friend Why can’t we be friends walk the straight and narrow line? Why couldn’t you be mine? I feel the same chills when your name hits my tongue But I must remain blind This is in no way a trick to pull you in This is my apology laced with passionate kisses Small nibbles and caresses My emotions raw and in the naked Feeling me now can’t be equivalent to back in 98 Now a woman with experience in my plate I wonder why I bit the forbidden apple and drank the poisonous wine I committed fraud yearning for something which wasn’t meant to be mine Although I’m not a criminal I gotta do the time Which separates me from you but why? I could write a collection of short stories of our love I could write happy ending after happy ending with love making scenes But I would be producing fiction and we both know the facts Girl meets boy girl and boy fall in love girl hurts boy boy ditches girl Girl tries and tries but boy locks the door and throws away the key throws away me...and us and every possibility of happy endings __________________ *What you looking at? I ain't no Mirror!*

06-10-2007, 11:56 AM	#2 (permalink)
tamunobelema Registered User Join Date: Jun 2007 Posts: 85 Points: 1,535.00 Bank: 10,304.56 Total Points: 11,839.56 Donate Rep Power: 0	like the emotion/mood of the poem. __________________ RIP Chief Mrs. Fedilia Itelima Dickens Fiberesima Tamuno be ori 'omi ye

06-11-2007, 12:58 AM	#3 (permalink)
Laydee-B Moderator Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 8,010 Points: 54,010.25 Bank: 5,000,207.13 Total Points: 5,054,217.38 Donate Rep Power: 1732215	Thanks! __________________ *What you looking at? I ain't no Mirror!*

06-11-2007, 02:19 AM	#4 (permalink)
AwholeLOTTAsoul Registered User Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: somewhere between perfection and procrastination. Posts: 1,189 Points: 1,500.85 Bank: 6,365.37 Total Points: 7,866.22 Donate Rep Power: 834315	so sad. nice write-up __________________ Life is shorter than i thought SUPEREGO EGO ID

06-13-2007, 07:44 PM	#5 (permalink)
Olukoso Registered User Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: uk Posts: 66 Points: 658.20 Bank: 6,414.09 Total Points: 7,072.29 Donate Rep Power: 0	well done, laydee. __________________ xix <> *Alpha*

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